Continuing our theme of editing this month I have a very special guest today *grins*
Today’s blog guest is the wonderful Della Galton who is a working writer (just tap her name into Amazon!!!) and agony aunt for Writers Forum Magazine. She has had over 1,000 short stories published in national magazines in the UK, and throughout the world.
Editing A Novel
So you’ve written a novel at top speed – what now? Package it up and send it out to all the publishers and agents in the Writer’s Handbook? Hold on just two ticks. Here are my top five editing tips.
Put it to one side for at least a fortnight, preferably longer, a month is good. Then you can go back to it with your cool editor’s head, not your passionate writer’s head.
Read it through in its entirety. Make some notes based on these points.
Does it begin in the right place?
Is it in the right viewpoint?
Does the plot work?
Is the main character really the main character?
Is the middle saggy?
How is the dialogue – good, bad or indifferent?
Can you tell the characters apart?
Does it end well?
Rewrite, based on your notes.
Repeat Tip One.
Edit again, as follows:
For me, the number one fault in first drafts is repetition. I often repeat myself when I write a first draft, both in meaning and with words. I don’t know whether it’s they way my brain works, but I’ll very often find that I’ve repeated a word either in the same paragraph or in the one below. It’s almost as if my writing brain is saying, that’s a good word, we’ll have another one of those, shall we?
I also have favourite words. You’ll have your own, but these are some of mine: just; quite; suddenly; that; and bit. I sometimes use the word search facility to go through and delete these words in my final edit.
Another way of repetition is to say the same thing in a different way.
And standing there in the sun, on that dusty afternoon Pam realised she’d never felt quite so happy in her life, which wasn’t all that surprising when she thought about it. Pottering around a car boot sale was one of her favourite ways to spend a Sunday morning.
These two sentences are both telling us that Pam is happy. Only one of them is needed, although in the end I discarded both in favour of showing Pam being happy rather than directly telling the reader.
Check for overused punctuation
I’m also rather fond of dashes – I litter them through my work – and it’s a difficult habit to break. You’ll find plenty besides the two in this paragraph that I’ve put in deliberately.
A good rule is that less is more. Be sparing with exclamation marks. They tend to be very visible.
Watch for telling when you’ve already shown
This is effectively another form of repetition. There is no need to show the reader something and then tell them as well.
i.e. Tears streamed down Laura’s face. She was very unhappy.
Fashions change, but I am of the opinion that adverbs should be used sparingly. They tend to weaken writing, rather than strengthen it. If possible use a strong verb instead. For example, instead of saying, he ran quickly, try he raced.
Most clichés came into being because they were the perfect way to say something. So why change them? The answer to this, I think, is that anything we hear too often is less meaningful – after a while it loses its meaning, and hence its impact, altogether.
They will certainly not make your writing original.
These are two good reasons to try and avoid them.
And finally, is it possible to over edit?
At the risk of contradicting myself, then I’d say, yes it is. Our first work tends to be a splurge of words that pour out – well they pour out on a good day! On a bad day it might feel more like pulling teeth with no anaesthetic. First drafts have a rawness about them and hopefully a sparkle. And I think that it’s possible to take this sparkle out with too much editing.
I’ve seen writers who have actually managed to polish all the sparkle away from their original piece, leaving a final draft that is flat and rather emotionless. Please be careful – but in the final analysis you’ll have to trust your instincts about when enough is enough. This gets much easier with time and experience.
Thank you so much Della, some great tips there!
If you found that useful, (i know i did!) nip over to Amazon where you can download Della’s eBook The Short Story Writer’s Toolshed – Your Quick Read, Straight-To-The-Point Guide To Writing and Selling Short Fiction (Writer’s Toolshed Series)
Originally written as a series for Writers’ Forum Magazine, this snappy, no-nonsense guide has been expanded, amended and updated. Using new examples from her own published short fiction, Della Galton takes you from ‘story idea’ to ‘final edit’, and demonstrates how to construct and polish the perfect short story, ready for publication.
Ahhhh, yes, repitition lol….I have a HUGE problem with that. Did any of those tips strike a chord (CLICHE ALERT lol) with you? 😉
This is a great post. Thank you Vikki and Della!
Della has written some fantastic stuff, fiction and non fiction 🙂
Repetition and dashes – my weaknesses!
I have a tendency to state the obvious Dianne, like she cried sadly or she smiled happily lol
Very good post.
When I am writing, thoughts are just like pouring in with ease . But editing to me looks like a daunting task. Very true, emotions are something that keep people hooked on. So definitely we should keep in mind that the flow and emotions in the final edited article are something we actually had when we wrote the original article.
Thanks for stopping by Rafath 🙂
Very true! 🙂
Excellent advice from Della – as we’d expect.
Thanks Patsy 🙂
He he he, of course! 🙂
I’ve learnt about over editing the hard way. It’s too easy to take away a character’s emotions and feelings in editing. It’s murder putting back emotions, and damn near impossible to get back the original passion, the sparkle. .
I think the secret is to keep each copy before you edit again, so that you can always go back 🙂
PS Loved the interview with Della. Terrific tips. Thank you. Oh dear, so many chords were struck. Lovely lady, lovely writer. I look forward to seeing her at Caerleon in 2013. x
Thanks Maddie 🙂
I don’t think I’ll be able to go to Caerleon, what with Faber, Swanwick, possibly Harrogate and then a writing retreat lol
Oh no! Who will I have late night drink, and an early morning cup of tea with on our bench? Only joking. I understand that you can’t do everything, but I shall miss you. x
Sorry honey 🙂 I’ll definitely miss our Bench, but I am too loyal to Swanwick 😉
Della provided me with some tips on my short story telling when I went to the Woman’s Weekly Live show in Manchester a couple of months ago: she was fantastic with advice. Not just the broad suggestions mentioned above – as she highlighted my specific love of adverbs and repetition – bus she also included how sometimes my work read like a dictionary because I was fond of complex words when simple ones would do.
Now I edit all my work with this in mind and find it lots easier!
Great guest post Vikki!
Della’s brilliant isn’t she 🙂
Good for you honey!
Thank you, but it’s not really my post 😉
Thanks for the great tips, Della. It’s a pleasure learning from someone who has been there and done that 🙂 Vikki … thans for having Della as your guest. This post is a keeper 🙂
Thanks Florence 🙂
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Great blog Vikki, and yes Della’s advice rings true. I have so many of the faults she mentioned! Oh dear.
Ha ha ha, you and me both Pauline 😉
Thanks honey xx
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Thanks Vikki and Della. I can also recommend Della’s books ‘How To Write and Sell Short Stories’ and ‘Moving On From Short Story to Novel’ (both are available from Amazon).
Good point Linda 🙂
We should have included the links shouldn’t we!
What a great guest!
Since I actually enjoy editing (though not as much as writing a first draft) I often worry that I might be editing the spark out of my story. I was glad to see that Della acknowledged this. I might need another set of fresh eyes to assess this at some point.
Glad to hear you’ve found Della’s article helpful Kirsten 🙂
I have to admit, it’s something I’ve never been too worried about, because I do the minimum amount of editing, up until now that is! I’m glad to know Della’s views on it now though 🙂
Good luck honey xx
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This is such a great article. I am definitely guilty of overusing dashes… In fact, I’m struggling to write this comment without using one!
Thanks Stacey 🙂
He he he!
Love the tips. A lot of them I am aware of, but have yet to break into a habit. Thanks for sharing.
Glad you found it helpful Kate 🙂
And thanks for stopping by when you’ve got so much going on your end (((((hugs)))))
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