Noooo, not mine…..Jennifer M Eaton
To celebrate her Blogiversary, Jennifer has invited her followers to write a story with her and so, I became participant number 9 🙂
You can read all the story on Jennifer’s blog, but here’s my contribution 🙂
“Please Janosc, leave us!” Janelle glared at her brother.
“Very well, I will wait outside.”
Marci watched in awe, as his wings carried him out through the open window.
“I must apologise for my brother Marci, he always thinks he knows best.”
Janelle sat down on the bare wooden floor and crossed her pale delicate legs. Her wings folding elegantly behind her as she lowered herself. She patted the floor and Marci sat down in front of her.
“I’m really confused Janelle, what Janosc said, I…..”
Janelle put her finger to her lips. “Hush child. Janosc was telling the truth. Being Queen isn’t the same for my people as it is for yours. There will be no pretty frock and crown for me.” She hung her head.
“Well don’t do it then.” Marci pleaded.
“Please try to understand Marci, my love for my brother is great, but my love for my people, our whole existence, is greater.”
Janelle got to her feet and walked towards Marci. She put her hand on Marci’s knee and smiled.
“Thank you Marci, for all your help.”
From outside came the sound of laughter. “Marci? Marci?”
“Thats my father!” Marci gasped.
“I must go child.”
Janelle opened her wings and flew up to Marci’s face, where she hovered, her wings beating silently. “Please don’t worry about me child, I know what I have to do.”
Before Marci could reply Janelle flew up to the open window.
“Will I ever see you again?” Marci asked as a tear trickled down her cheek.
Janelle turned and smiled, and with a wave, she was gone.
A tear dripped from Marci’s chin onto her hand. She watched, as it rolled down her finger, then dropped onto the wooden floor, next to the Olden Leaf. She scrambled to her feet, and snatched up the leaf. Taking a small wooden pot from her shelf she placed it inside and wiped her face with her sleeve.
“Marci? Marci? Oh, where is that girl?” Her mother called.
“I’m coming!” Marci called in return and ran down the stairs to great her father.
This will make no sense whatsoever unless you’ve been keeping up with the story lol. My little section is very basic compared to some of the beautiful writing some of Jennifer’s participants have submitted. But I’ve enjoyed the challenge, especially as I’ve never written any YA stuff before.
Do you think I should give YA a go? Or throw in the towel now? Lol
HAPPY ANNIVERSARY JENNIFER – May there be many more to come!
I think you wrote the piece wonderfully! If you want to give YA a try, I think you would certainly be good at it. 🙂
Thanks Sara 🙂
To be honest, I wouldn’t know where to start lol
Awesomeness! And I totally love that tree in the picture. Did you take that phot?
Thanks Jennifer 🙂
Yep, I did, although I can’t remember where it is lol. I think it was in the grounds of a castle or stately home we visited. Gorgeous isn’t it!
Give it a go – well done!!!
Thanks Dianne 🙂
It’s something I’d never considered before, so who knows 😉
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Hey, I think you did a great job! I love the picture of the tree, too. Pretty cool. I love finds like that. However, with my luck, when I come across them, I don’t have a camera anywhere near me.
As to if you should take a stab at writing YA? Why not? Even if you discover you don’t like it, you will have stepped outside your comfort zone, which is a good thing.
Awwwww, thanks honey 🙂
Do you know what? You’re right! I think I may just give it a go 🙂
Well done, Vikki! You gave me a great jumping off point, but tore me in two different directions. Should I follow Marci to discover more about her relationship with her father, or remain with the fairy perspective. Hmmm, what to do? 😉
He he he, good luck honey 🙂
Super to see Jenelle exercising her queenly prerogatives and Janosc backing down. I really like that you’ve filled in one of the gaps too.
I normally write butch stuff filled with military dust-ups and same sex relationships. YA is very edgy territory for me.
Thanks Elin 🙂
I really wanted the story to go back to Marci he he he 😉
Wow, what a contrast then! 🙂 It’s given me a bit of a buzz to try my hand at a full YA story 🙂
Well done Vikki, You’ve pulled it together nicely.
Thanks Susan 🙂
I see its come together beautifully. Why not try something outside your comfort zone. You might surprise yourself even more than this post. Wonderful.
Thanks hon 🙂
I did surprise myself actually, so I will definitely be giving it a go in the future 🙂
I like this a lot. I’m doing the challenge, also–I’m almost up–so I read this with great interest in hopes of getting some ideas for my turn. I think you did a fab job and you should keep trying it if you like doing it. 🙂
Thanks honey 🙂
I read through every segment and thought, “but I wanna know what’s going on with Marci!” lol 😉
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Definitely keep it up … you have added a really great element to the story.
Thanks Liz, and thanks for stopping by 🙂
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Vikki- your piece was sweet and the type of scene the story needed at this point. I think you could make YA work if that is you interest. I look forward to reading more of your writing. I am entering the story soon and trying to catch up on the plot. I invite you to read and critique my entry coming very soon.
Thank you so much Joe 🙂
Ive never really thought of doing YA to be honest lol
Ooooo, good luck honey!