Nooooo, not me, I’m a married women…..but then so is she š
This is the piece I wrote that was inspired by the “powder room” photo on Saturday š In first draft, I’m still experimenting with first person POV.
“Quick, hold the door and keep watch.”
“But Sara, I can’t physically stop people coming in?”
“Yes you can, go on, stand in front of the door.”
I rested my weight against the door and tried to focus my attention on the flock wallpaper rather than my friend, stripping down to her bra and knickers.
“I don’t know why we have to go through this every time. You looked fine.” I muttered under my breath.
Sara laughed as she pulled up the scarlet Lycra mini dress.
“Oh please, you know if Dave saw me going out like this he’d kill me!”
I had to admit she was right. Sara’s husband was possessive. She was only allowed to see me once a month and as far as he was concerned you didn’t need to dress up for Bingo. But then, he didn’t know that we never actually went.
Sara folded her jeans and T shirt and placed them in her bag. She was already wearing high heels, Dave loved her in stilettos.
“Right, all done, just the makeup.” She twirled “How do I look?”
I wanted to say like a whore, but I bit my tongue. It wouldn’t have worried her anyway, that was the look she wanted.
“Great, very sexy.” Well, it was partly true.
She quickly applied some more makeup and pouted her blood red lips.
“Now, just a little something to get me in the mood.” She winked and laid a small mirror on the shelf above the sink. I bowed my head and listened to her snorting.
“Do you have to do that in a place like this?”
“Oh, stop being such an old woman Chlo. Right, let’s go get em.” She shrieked with laughter and as she leaned over my shoulder to the door handle, she paused. “and don’t forget, if I pull, I’ve stayed at yours tonight.”
I smiled, I knew the drill.
Hmmmmm, not too sure where that one is going. Perhaps tonight, Chloe will tell Dave the truth?
I’m open to suggestions?
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Yep. Makes me want to know what happened. What’s Sara keeping at bay at home by doing this when she goes out…? Adrenaline junkie or seeking escape from something darker? I’d read more, I’m curious… š
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Thanks Holly…..hmmmmm, I guess this could end up being pretty dark couldn’t it š I do tend to write dark stuff, I’m not really a happy ending person lol
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I am glad this is the first thing I read after studying curriculum material for my new job, and I mean that sincerely. I have not had much pleasure reading lately, including blogs.
I think your story can go so many places. I could not see where it was going. I wondered the most about the narrator. That shows you’re off to a good start when you have the reader interested in first person narrator!
Great job!
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Awwwww, thank you so much Becca š
Yeah, I’m kinda wondering about Chloe….is she secretly in love with Dave? Ooooo, this could go sooo many ways lol
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An interesting beginning which has me shouting, “Run, Chlo, run!” The title should have the word “frenemies” in it.
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Ha ha ha! Thanks Joan, yes, me too!
Ooooo, now “Frenemies” would make a great title!
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I can see Dave getting abusive if he found out and those shoes are fabulous!!!!! I want them.
Ps: I’ve never heard the phrase “on the pull” before. I’ve just been educated. Sara got a lot going on with her. Seriously.
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Yeah, I’m thinking Dave is a right nasty bit of work, but, is it because he knows EXACTLY what his wife is like? š
The shoes belong to my daughter CC….Kurt Geigers I think š
Ha ha ha, there I go again, forgetting that I’m just so bloody English. Hope you understand it š
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Ooo, the truth could make for an interesting conversation! š
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He he he š
Thanks CB xx
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It shouldn’t matter what a woman wears, she should be able to go out for the night and be safe. Sarah, however, coked up and so obviously on the pull, is heading for a sticky end up an ally if she’s not careful. So is Chloe if possessive, aggressive, Dave finds out she’s been helping his wife to deceive him. Time to knock this friendship on the head Chloe, before Dave does. Find someone else to go to Bingo with PDQ.
This story could end up a novel. x
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He he he, thanks Maddie š
Yeah, I guess it could turn into a novel….although I think Adele Parks most recent one has a similar theme. I haven’t read it yet, although I have got it.
Thanks honey xx
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Yes very good, want to know more. Not too sure about the drugs bit, its intriguing enough without it, and if he’s that possesive how would she get them?
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Thanks Jayne š
Oh, come on, it’s THE POWDER ROOM lol…there had to be a few white lines involved lol š
But….good point on how she would get hold of the drugs…definitely something to think about if I decide to take it further š
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Sorry I was still thinking about talc! haha
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Ha ha ha!!!!! š
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What a great beginning! I could see this as a novel too. I feel sorry for Chloe already as she clearly has a toxic friend and is too soft. I can see Chloe getting into bother and Sara getting off scot free – for now.
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He he he, thanks Francesca š
Yeah, I kind of imagine these 2 have been friends for years and that Sara is ALWAYS getting Chloe in trouble š
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Really enjoyed that snippet – and I would definitely read more! As for the coke – it’s a lot easier to get nowadays, it could be someone from work or a friend of a friend? Dave may be possessive but Sara sounds clever and street smart, she could get anything she wanted. And she doesn’t seem to let Dave worry her. How scary is Dave, exactly? Maybe he needs to be careful of Sara?? š xx
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Thanks V š
Ahhhh, yeah, true….especially if she’s a regular user, it would be fairly easy wouldn’t it….perhaps even Dave is a user š
Oooooo, so many things to think about! Lol
Thanks honey xx
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loving the story š – relationships are always very interesting and they never seem to be what we see on the surface.
Love the shoes š xxx
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Thanks Sam š
I LOVE writing about people and relationships š
Ha ha ha, I’ll tell my daughter š
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“I smiled. I knew the drill” Chloe seems a trifle naughty, too. Partners in crime?
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He he he, possibly š
I’m thinking that Chloe may have alterior motives š
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I liked the narrator, she’s got voice. But I’m also waiting for dark stuff in her closet. She can’t be a total goody-two-shoes, can she ? š
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He he he, well, I’m thinking that she secretly harbours a thing for Dave š
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This is great! I want to know what happens! I’m hooked…
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Awwwww, thanks honey š
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You really have the cutest shoes!
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Thanks Emma š
Not mine though, my daughters….I’d break my neck in those lol
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